Teaser Tuesday…Can I get a Woot Woot?

Posted by houndrat on Tuesday Jun 1, 2010 Under writing, Young Adult

So, this week, I’m posting something entirely different, from my new WIP. This story is light on the depression and heavy on the random, but, well, you’ll probably figure that out for yourself. Reilly is the MC’s ex. My MC is typically pretty studious and maybe even a bit uptight, but Reilly seems to bring out her playful side. Weird yet familiar to be switching back to past tense.

“This thing is still running?” I eyed the rusty-looking beast that masqueraded as Reilly’s car. It had been a hearse—once. Before Reilly had gotten a hold of it and painted it ocean blue, the board racks on top providing the crowning touch. I winced when Reilly popped the locks and the door squealed open.

“Hey, don’t talk about her like that. She’s been good to me.” He patted the door. It groaned, bouncing on wobbly hinges.

“Uh-huh. And now you can be good to her by letting her retire in the old cars’ home. Or, god, at least investing in a can of WD40.”

He waited until I cleared the pile of food wrappers off the seat—seriously, did he live in this thing?—before closing the door behind me. He leaned in the half-open window with a theatrical sigh. “You never did recognize quality when you saw it.”

He ducked when I tried to peg him with a decaying Subway wrapper, the sound of his laughter filling the car with nostalgia. We’d had some good times together in this deathtrap, taking it down the coast, salty wind whipping through our hair. Summer had practically flown by as fast as the scenery. Which actually wasn’t saying that much. If I remembered correctly, this thing could only hit 60 on a good day.

Reilly cranked the engine once, twice, three times, before it sputtered to a start. “Woo hoo! We’re off! C’mon, let’s hear it—a little excitement. You’ve got to be pumped to be doing something you can’t check off your study schedule for a change. Can I get a woot? Maybe a yeah baby?”

My eye roll answered for me.

“No? How ‘bout a fist pump, then? Aw, c’mon. Relax a little. There’s no serious face allowed in the Reilly-mobile. In fact, I sprayed it with buzzkill repellant just the other day.”

His boyish grin dared me to return it. As we rumbled out of the school parking lot, I laid my head back on the cracked headrest, feeling an answering smile flirt with my lips. Whatever—why the hell not? To shut him up, if nothing else.

“Woot!” I yelled at the top of my lungs. Then I pumped my fist out the window for good measure, laughing at my own stupidity. But when I rolled my head to capture Reilly’s reaction, the laughter fizzled in my throat. He was staring at me with this expression full of wonder. Like he’d just seen his perfect wave.

His gaze shifted back to the road. I noticed the muscles on his forearms straining under his skin like taut ropes. He glanced back, and the look was gone. It was just a typical Reilly smile, the same one he gave everyone.

I turned away to stare out the window. Clearly, the fresh air was making me hallucinate. It was either that, or the smell of rotting burgers wafting up from underneath my feet.

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16 Responses to “Teaser Tuesday…Can I get a Woot Woot?”

  1. Caitlin Says:

    Wow, this is brilliant! They’re so cute – ahh, old flames ;)

    I definitely want more!!

  2. Akin Says:

    Aww dang! I was hoping to be first, and Caitlin stole my thunder! :( Great teaser. Loved the dialogue. Loved the writing and I love Reilly. I wonder why they broke up; he seems like a great guy. I do hope he finds someone else! Seriously. I dont want him chasing after your MC

  3. Bee Says:

    Woah..Reilly’s cheerfulness is infectious. He got me too.
    Great job on this. Love the scene. Love the voice.

  4. Leasie Says:

    Awwww…. this is so fun… and you know me i love fun… and it’s completely believable… but i’m also hooked… the muscle thing… what is that about… :D

  5. Tracey Says:

    Aw, they’re so cute! Love the voice and the blue hearse!

  6. Jamie Says:

    So cute! Love this! WOOT!! :)

  7. christacarol Says:

    Hah! Woot! This is great. Loved the last para.

  8. sue Says:

    This is brilliant. I love the description of the car, especially the inside (sounds kinda like ours, thanks to hubby).
    Great stuff, the mixture of silliness and nostalgia and a hint of something deeper.

  9. angie Says:

    I agree with others – too cute. And Reilly reminds me of my brother. His back seat was a garbage can, filled with empty pop cans and wrappers and… well you get the idea.

  10. Bri Says:

    I LOL’ed at buzzkill repellent. Well, it’s no secret that I love this, or that I love Reilly. I can’t get over how much I love these two. So adorable. And I agree with another commenter; Reilly’s cheer is infectious. I can’t help but smile when I read about him! I love it, obviously :)

  11. Jill Wheeler Says:

    Love their rapport! Isn’t it weird to go back to past tense after writing in present??

  12. Liz Page Says:

    I’m just so in love with your writing, it always gets to me. I love Reilly, and the way he just brings her happiness out. Adorable and so honest that it reminded me of that feeling of being with an old flame where nothing has changed but everything is different.

  13. Ellen Says:

    I love the voice here! And you can feel the nostalgia, it definitely adds an undercurrent of meaning to the scene (although the goofiness is great too ;) )

  14. Raven Says:

    I LOVED this! The voice is fun and I’m hooked. Reilly seems like a great character. ^_^

  15. Remilda Graystone Says:

    This was great. I love Reilly and your main character sounds like she could be lots of fun too. I wonder what their story is and what their history holds. Great tease.

  16. JennW Says:

    Love this. I am really liking this story what I’ve seen so far. Love how he looks at her like “the perfect wave.” Lots of good lines in here to characterize them both.

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