Comments on: Cut parking lot scene from Demon Guard http://www.houndrat.com/2009/11/24/cut-parking-lot-scene-from-demon-guard/ Finding Time to Write with 3 Dogs, 2 Kids & an ADHD Husband. Thu, 02 Feb 2012 16:48:56 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.2.1 By: houndrat http://www.houndrat.com/2009/11/24/cut-parking-lot-scene-from-demon-guard/comment-page-1/#comment-1405 houndrat Wed, 25 Nov 2009 19:41:41 +0000 http://www.houndrat.com/?p=240#comment-1405 Thanks *so* much--I think that would help a lot! :) I luvz Blond crits! :) Thanks *so* much–I think that would help a lot! :) I luvz Blond crits! :)

]]> By: Gretchen http://www.houndrat.com/2009/11/24/cut-parking-lot-scene-from-demon-guard/comment-page-1/#comment-1404 Gretchen Wed, 25 Nov 2009 18:09:46 +0000 http://www.houndrat.com/?p=240#comment-1404 First off, I love the new blog design. Second, great scene, great action mixed with the horrifying emotion of the ending. The paragraph that starts here - The remaining demon’s brawny arm still circled Allie’s neck - and the short one after I found my eye skimming only because we realize what is about to happen and we want to see if it actually does. You can move it faster there. Otherwise, I thought it was awesome. First off, I love the new blog design. Second, great scene, great action mixed with the horrifying emotion of the ending. The paragraph that starts here – The remaining demon’s brawny arm still circled Allie’s neck – and the short one after I found my eye skimming only because we realize what is about to happen and we want to see if it actually does. You can move it faster there. Otherwise, I thought it was awesome.

]]> By: DH Kuypers http://www.houndrat.com/2009/11/24/cut-parking-lot-scene-from-demon-guard/comment-page-1/#comment-1403 DH Kuypers Wed, 25 Nov 2009 15:07:03 +0000 http://www.houndrat.com/?p=240#comment-1403 Wow. Lots of action & great writing!! You were really able to visualize what was going on here. Wow. Lots of action & great writing!! You were really able to visualize what was going on here.

]]> By: Aimee http://www.houndrat.com/2009/11/24/cut-parking-lot-scene-from-demon-guard/comment-page-1/#comment-1402 Aimee Wed, 25 Nov 2009 14:22:25 +0000 http://www.houndrat.com/?p=240#comment-1402 Wow! I can't believe this was cut! This was amazing, I loved it. Great descriptions! Wow! I can’t believe this was cut! This was amazing, I loved it. Great descriptions!

]]> By: Paranormalchick http://www.houndrat.com/2009/11/24/cut-parking-lot-scene-from-demon-guard/comment-page-1/#comment-1401 Paranormalchick Wed, 25 Nov 2009 13:58:18 +0000 http://www.houndrat.com/?p=240#comment-1401 OMG, I can't believe you had to cut this...it woulda made me sick to take this out! But if it's whats best for the plot... Great snip, discriptions were rockin' OMG, I can’t believe you had to cut this…it woulda made me sick to take this out! But if it’s whats best for the plot…

Great snip, discriptions were rockin’

]]> By: Kristin http://www.houndrat.com/2009/11/24/cut-parking-lot-scene-from-demon-guard/comment-page-1/#comment-1400 Kristin Wed, 25 Nov 2009 07:04:24 +0000 http://www.houndrat.com/?p=240#comment-1400 Action scene! Very fun and very descriptive. Action scene! Very fun and very descriptive.

]]> By: CoryLeslie http://www.houndrat.com/2009/11/24/cut-parking-lot-scene-from-demon-guard/comment-page-1/#comment-1399 CoryLeslie Wed, 25 Nov 2009 04:31:45 +0000 http://www.houndrat.com/?p=240#comment-1399 Fantastic action scene! I loved the descriptions. You could feel these bodies moving! Fantastic action scene! I loved the descriptions. You could feel these bodies moving!

]]> By: colbymarshall http://www.houndrat.com/2009/11/24/cut-parking-lot-scene-from-demon-guard/comment-page-1/#comment-1398 colbymarshall Wed, 25 Nov 2009 03:46:51 +0000 http://www.houndrat.com/?p=240#comment-1398 I agree--why cut!? You have a talent for action scenes...it never slows. And it was great how the action so seamlessly blended with emotion of the scene, too. Good one! I agree–why cut!? You have a talent for action scenes…it never slows. And it was great how the action so seamlessly blended with emotion of the scene, too. Good one!

]]> By: Niyrak http://www.houndrat.com/2009/11/24/cut-parking-lot-scene-from-demon-guard/comment-page-1/#comment-1397 Niyrak Wed, 25 Nov 2009 03:03:15 +0000 http://www.houndrat.com/?p=240#comment-1397 So much action. I like it. Did you let the friend live in the other version? Just curious ya know. So much action. I like it. Did you let the friend live in the other version? Just curious ya know.

]]> By: Jennifer (Herb) http://www.houndrat.com/2009/11/24/cut-parking-lot-scene-from-demon-guard/comment-page-1/#comment-1396 Jennifer (Herb) Wed, 25 Nov 2009 00:57:52 +0000 http://www.houndrat.com/?p=240#comment-1396 I can't imagine cutting this but I absolutely love your writing style and would hate anything so beautiful to be cut. I can’t imagine cutting this but I absolutely love your writing style and would hate anything so beautiful to be cut.

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